Monday, 3 September 2012

Summertime (No Man's Land) by Tiffany Sapphire

Jackie is married to Carmelo. Her marriage isn’t a happy one. When Carmelo invites exotic dancer, Summer, to come and live with them, Jackie is furious. Her anger is mainly because Summer is an exotic dancer, plus she thinks Summer wants to take Carmelo away from her.

As time goes by, Jackie and Summer learn to get along together. Even becoming friendly towards one another. Neither woman could know that their lives are about to be changed forever.

This story is told in two parts. The first part focuses on Summer's job as an exotic dancer. How she is exploited and extremely unhappy. We also hear about Jackie’s unhappy marriage and how Jackie and Summer gradually become friends. The second part of the story is all about Jackie and Summer. Their growing attraction toward each other, the sexual awakening Jackie experiences and eventually how Jackie and Summer fall in love.

The actual storyline in this fairly short book is quite good. Unfortunately, the book is in dire need of an editor and possibly a couple of good beta readers. The dialogue is stilted and choppy. I lost count of the amount of times the characters were ‘screaming’ at each other.There are parts of the story that simply do not ring true. For instance, what everyday woman would carry a stun gun around with them? I don’t intend to list everything, but suffice it to say, there are a lot of things that don’t add up.

I found the poetry at the beginning of each chapter distracting. It pulled me right out of the story and I found myself skipping over it. So, I may have missed some vital points in the storyline.

If you can get past the editorial problems, you may enjoy the story.

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